brilliant. You have a good grasp of structure and clarity. To me young composers try too hard to sound original and as a result, structure, clarity and enjoyability are lost. But not with you.
Wow its really brilliant and enjoyable, expressive too.
One thing i would add is that might pay to relook your dynamics. This might benefit from a little kore subtlety and nuance, strangelymyou stray from any dynamic below mp where in some places a pianissimo would have a great effect. Also i think try to minimise the big FFs
Thanks you for your comments... and I'm glad you enjoyed the piece.
Its not that easy to judge a piece through a midi, perhaps a recorded performance would have done a better job in showcasing this piece, well this is entirely obvious.
I appreciate your comments,
Regards,
Saul
Three Works:
Fantasy In F sharp Minor - Allegro Con Fuoco for Solo Piano
Well, I listened to your "Molto Allegro Appassionato", and, well, it's certainly Appassionato. It's mostly very enjoyable, but one thing that I would say is - your climaxes peter out. At least twice, you build up to a fortissimo climax, and then stop - and start again at the beginning of the theme. Now, on its own this needn't be a bad thing, but unfortunately when the theme 'resets', it's not (as far as I can tell) altered at all; it's practically a straight repeat. The very last run of the theme, at the end, is transformed by about as much as you should have transformed it the first time it repeated.
In other words, it's a very nice piece, but it doesn't last six minutes, it merely goes on for six minutes.
That piece embodies things that I was reffering to in previous post. You give the piece pompous title but you don't put into it anything that would make the music get along with the title - some composers write pieces called Sonata No. X in Y-y and people give it nicknames because they are so rich in real stuff.
You could name this piece "prelude no. X" and this would be as far at the music goes, there is nothing but the piece per se, a conventional and meaningless (perhaps you honestly wanted to give it some particular meaning, but I bet you failed) twang-twang that may seem lyrical and truely emotional to lonely schoolgirl that feels lonely and write poems like:
"och, where are you my love...
och...
I want to die!!!!!!
darkest despair eats my teddy bear
my friend has boyfriend
I want one too
darkest despair
leave me alone
och
ach
and the rain falls... lonely......"
There's also a very distinct difference between "I disagree", and "you've got some issues", or even better yet, "you sound like a miserable slob".
you need to tame your ego. when people give you nice little compliments you appreciate their comments, when people offer less-than-favorable reviews, you lash out.
Nope, dear sir, they were made in purpose to inform you that pieces in slow tempi are your Achilles' heel - my comment pointed out quite concrete aspect of your compositions that I consider to be weakness and that alone disqualifies it as unconstructive foam-beating written just in purpose to insult you.
Apparently you are not the right person to share my rich thoughts with so I guess I'll just let you be so you can enjoy diffrent kind of comments, devoid of content and constructive meaning that will make you happy until you will get old as composer of twang-twang's that may seem lyrical and (...)
Well, I had this lady from Jerusalem named Sarah who plays the Oboe purchase the score from me of one of my ancient Dances. That one was in G minor No.1 and basically it has very similar structural similarities with the E minor, the one in question.
I hope that this Email will help you understand why some people (including me) felt that it has an ancient feel, and that its also a dance.
Please read:
"Hello Dear Sarah, I got the check today. Toda Raba (thank you in Hebrew).
I really liked what you wrote in the letter :" All Beautiful music in the world has in it sparks of the songs of the Holy Temple, which also went into Galut (exile) with the Jewish People"...
That was a beautiful statement, thanks for that.
I have attached my work in a Finale format to this Email and also a PDF file of the work.
Also, you can visit my site at : Musicalpaintings.net to listen to my music, including the Ancient Dance In G minor No.1 that you purchased and the Ancient Dance in G minor No.2 which I find to be beautiful as well. You can also View my Paintings.
I hope that you will enjoy this music.
With Best Wishes,
Saul Dzorelashvili
P.S .... I will very much appreciate if you'll keep me updated on the progress of your arrangement and performance of this piece. Please let me know if you have any questions or need any assistance with the work."
I listened to these pieces straight through, which (believe me) was quite difficult, because a bit like Aramis above I found them somewhat conventional, shallow and a bit boring. Let me qualify that by saying that you can obviously compose, and have a sound knowledge of counterpoint for one thing. But I think that your knowledge of thematic development may need to be strengthened. I must also say that it's great that you have included the scores with the recording so that musicians can look at exactly what you are doing (I don't read music as I'll go into shortly).
I found the Romance too repetitive - not much development? I thought that the piece was too long for the quality of the material involved. Some editing might help there. The Fantasy, Scherzo & Wild River Etude sounded too much like J.S.Bach - not that there's a problem with that, but some other composers have done more with this kind of influence. Just listen to something like Janacek's Zdenka Variations for piano. I felt that At The Ocean and especially Love in the Forest suffered from the same fault as the Romance - too long for the material.
I am not a composer and don't know how to read music. I am only making criticisms from the point of view of someone with 20+ years of listening to classical music of all types. If you want to extend your range, I would definitely check out some of the piano works of Janacek for a start - he did so many interesting things with the barest bones of ideas. The two cd set on DGG with Rudolf Firkusny playing most (or all?) of Janacek's piano pieces has given me much pleasure. Not to speak of some of the solo piano works of Elliot Carter, which go beyond most of what I've heard...
Interesting remarks, thank you.
I get such variety of comments about these works, I should mention that the vast majority are positive comments, but I do accept criticism that was made with good intentions.
ı think your music is not puerile.And this is the biggest sickness of todays composers out of all this rhetorics your etude is good but some parts bragadocio and this composition has a depression about style hence i cant understand. Out of this compositions your music is garbage. The scherzo has an awful melody,your music feels me you'r unexperienced.This is just my opinions.
This is one of my Orchestral Works.
Its called :" Chanukah In G minor".
I have written this piece a few years ago, right before the Holiday of Chanukah. It took me about a month to complete it. This piece is very emotional and personal for me, because I was born on Chanukah and I feel connected to this Great Jewish Holiday, which happens to be my favorite Holiday.
Regards,
Saul
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