Nice balance to the piece.
Gonna read over it, I'll try to record it but I can't guarantee good quality as my mic is pathetic.
I really love this little piece. But it think it would be more consistent with the harmonic language to change the C at the end of bars 7 and 23 to a D. Just a suggestion, it clashes less and resolves well. You'll end up with what amounts to a strong cadence, C, F maj7, G, C-F-C , rather than C, Fmaj7, C maj 7, C-F-C.
Last edited by MJTTOMB; Apr-18-2010 at 23:03.
Yeah, this is quite cool. Generally I enjoyed it.
But I have to admit not really enjoying the clashes at the end allthough I myself often go for it when composing. I don't know why. Somehow the listener, in that case me, just does not get what one wants when listening to it. This can be good or bad. Depends how you like it.
Wow that was very good. Clap clap
Very nicely done ... I like the dissonance between the B and C as it gives this little piece lots of character. Well done
This feels like a weird to have comments on the compositions by someone way more knowledgeable than myself, but I got this idea: maybe the whole middle section could be transposed a pure fourth downwards (or a fifth upwards)? That way it would start where section a ended (on a C) and end on the dominant (G major), making a suction towards the return of theme a.
Last edited by skrjablin; May-19-2010 at 01:12. Reason: added an attachment showing what it would sound like
Yeah, that sounds like an improvenent.
At last to guess, instead of always knowing. To be able to say “ah” and “oh” and “hey” instead of “yea” and “amen. ” ~ Wings of Desire
Now some time has passed I'd like to mention I really started loving it.
Charming little piece - dissonances and all.