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    Default My small piece - Criticism requested

    Take II

    Tried to follow Palestrina's style in both voices. The red circles show where it departs from it.
    Anyway, here it is the score and a link to the audio file.

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    https://soundcloud.com/rbarata/free-cou ... er-take-ii

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    I don't notice any errors. Pretty standard first species counterpoint, so good job.

    Shouldn't the first number's label be a "5" not an "8"? And it might sound more sensible as an 8-bar phrase instead of 9, imo.

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    Thank you for the reply, Torkelburger

    Yes, it should be a "5". After some modifications to the piece (which included adding the 9th measure) I reviewed all the intervals but it seems I skipped that one. Thanks again.

    A question: it seems the piece starts in Aeolian (A) but then it finishes in Ionian (also A). Am I correct?

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    Yeah, starts in Aeolian. Can't tell really what it finishes in since no third of the scale is present in the voices. Safe to assume the C natural and F natural are still in the listener's ear so it ends in A harmonic minor probably.

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    Yes, the raised 7th degree.

    Thanks again.

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    The only thing is I feel I heard the D in the bass one too many times in that phrase. I would replace the D in bar 7 with C and have an appoggiatura effect.

    Last edited by Phil loves classical; Dec-14-2019 at 03:33.
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    Thanks for the sugestion, Plc
    That's another possibility. According my knowledge level it would be not admissible but as still know little I accept it.

    Thanks again.

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    Voice-leading you must learn, young padawan.

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